Overall, this paper is quite strong and is held back only by a few things.
Its usage of images in tandem with descriptions of the design make it easy to image how it is used. having an image of each individual component draws attention to one specific aspect of the design, which works very well. in fact, I would say it’s always good to add more images, because they have been used very effectively so far.
Some critiques of this report are that it repeats itself in some places. It can also be wordy at times and could improve by being a bit more succinct. There were a few times where I wanted to add a comment, but I think this is an issue that can just be solved by printing the paper out and reading aloud to see which sentences are troublesome.
Another place it could be improved is by adding something to pages where there are long stretches of just paragraphs. An image or a bulleted list could add variety.
I liked the bulleted section under design requirements. Having sections like that when something is listed, breaks up the paragraph structure and leads to a more interesting reading experience. I also like the way there are bolded statements that make the main message of the bullet point very clear.
Still, the design of the project itself is really good, as it is both simple and effective. And, as I said before, this is a good report overall.
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